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The graph below shows the number of mail services of TNT and FedEx between 1920 and 2000.

The graph below shows the number of mail services of TNT and FedEx between 1920 and 2000. qaP85
The provided line graph compares the statistics about delivering posts by two different companies, such as FedEx and TNT, from 1920 to 2000. Overall, it is evident that TNT’s service saw an upward trend over a period shown, while the number of parcels delivered by FedEx slightly changed despite some fluctuations. In 1920, the number of parcels of TNT were around 5, 000 and rose slightly to reach about 7, 500 in 1940. After it has levelled off for 20 years, it started increasing noticeably until 1960 and reached 11, 000. The numbers remained relatively unchanged between 1960 and 1980, and unexpectedly soared dramatically in 1980 and surged by 15, 000 until 2, 000. The figure for a FedEx showed 15, 000 in 1980 and it rose remarkably during 2 decades. However, this upward trend was suddenly broken and the number of mails plunged sharply over the next 10 years before it went smoothly from 1950 to 1960 at about 12, 000 parcels. Then, the FedEx services soared again, and from 1970 it maintained the same level till the end.
The provided line graph compares the statistics about delivering posts by two
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companies
, such as FedEx and TNT, from 1920 to 2000.

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, it is evident that TNT’s service
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saw
an upward trend over a period shown, while the
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number
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slightly
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changed
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some
fluctuations.

In 1920, the
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number
of parcels of TNT were around 5, 000 and rose
slightly
to reach about 7, 500 in 1940. After it has levelled off for 20 years, it
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started
increasing
noticeably
until 1960 and reached 11, 000. The
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remained
relatively
unchanged between 1960 and 1980, and
unexpectedly
soared
dramatically
in 1980 and surged by 15, 000 until 2, 000.

The figure for a FedEx
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showed
15, 000 in 1980 and it rose
remarkably
during 2 decades.
However
, this upward trend was
suddenly
broken and the
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number
of mails plunged
sharply
over the
next
10 years
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before
it went
smoothly
from 1950 to 1960 at about 12, 000 parcels. Then, the FedEx services soared again, and from 1970 it maintained the same level till the
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end
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the number of mail services of TNT and FedEx between 1920 and 2000.

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