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The table graph illustrates that desire of give up smoking by several reason while the another one eloborates that they intend to give up.The data is measured in percentage respectively.

The table graph illustrates that desire of give up smoking by several reason while the another one eloborates that they intend to give up. The data is measured in percentage respectively. AwJRM
At a fleeting glance, it can clearly seen that, the main cause of smokers to give up for stopping is for general health 71% with financial considerations 31% whereas the risk of smoking related diseases 25% owing with the nect two most famous reasons. One of them is ongoing health issues it is harmful for health. Moreover, the another one under the pressure of their loved ones 16%. Moving to the next graph, the majority of smokers questioned (71%) intended to give up, with light smokers more inclined to stop (79%) than heavy smokers (60%). 35% of smokers said they were planning to give up within the next six months and only 12% said they were prepared to try within the following month. Although only 29% of smokers on average were unwilling to give up, heavy smokers were almost twice as unwilling to try as light smokers, which perhaps reflects the level of addiction in the former group. To recap, it can be sharply summarised that, the higher proportion of given up smoking because of health in general. However, the least intend to give up by heavy smokers.
At a fleeting glance, it can
clearly
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that, the main cause of smokers to
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give
up for stopping is for general
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health
71% with financial considerations 31% whereas the
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risk
of smoking related diseases 25% owing with the
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nect
two most
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famous
reasons. One of them is ongoing
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health
issues it is harmful for
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health
.
Moreover
, the another one under the pressure of their
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loved
ones 16%.

Moving to the
next
graph, the majority of smokers questioned (71%) intended to
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give
up, with light smokers more inclined to
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stop
(79%) than heavy smokers (60%). 35% of smokers said they were planning to
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give
up within the
next
six months and
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only
12% said they
were prepared
to try within the following month. Although
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only
29% of smokers on average were unwilling to
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give
up, heavy smokers were almost twice as unwilling to try as light smokers, which perhaps reflects the level of addiction in the former group.

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sharply
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summarised
that, the higher proportion of
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given
up smoking
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because
of
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health
in general
.
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, the least intend to
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give
up by heavy smokers.
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IELTS academic The table graph illustrates that desire of give up smoking by several reason while the another one eloborates that they intend to give up. The data is measured in percentage respectively.

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