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The diagram below shows a neighborhood before and after a mall was constructed

The diagram below shows a neighborhood before and after a mall was constructed AwJnL
The given diagram illustrate the information about the neighborhood after they built shopping center. Overall, when the mall was construct, there were lots of changes and it look flatterb than beforeBefore the mall was formed, in the northwest, there was a forest and next to the forest there were two stores one was book store and another was shose store. Moreover, both of the two stores were opposite to the main stress. Behind the forest and stores, it was a natural state which was located in southwest, lake was put in the middle of the natural shape and it also located along the main street. On the left of diagram, there were 5 households in main street and 5 households in Oak street. After a construction completion, the neighbor had a new look and it had little bit different than before. Two on three the forest and stores were changed by the new shopping center and behind it was parking lot. In addition, mall which was located in northwest and parking lot was located in Southeast. One on four the households was developed and changed into another parking lot to served the customers who go to shopping mall. Finally all the household near Oak street weren’t changed
The
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diagram illustrate the information about the neighborhood after they built shopping center.
Overall
, when the
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mall
was construct, there were
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lots
of
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changes
and it
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look
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flatterb
than
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beforeBefore
the
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mall
was formed
, in the northwest, there was a
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forest
and
next
to the
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forest
there were two
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stores
one was book
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store
and another was
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shose
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store
.
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, both of the two
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stores
were opposite to the main
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stress
. Behind the
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forest
and
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stores
, it was a natural state which was
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located
in southwest, lake
was put
in the middle of the natural shape and it
also
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located
along the main
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street
. On the
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left
of diagram, there were 5
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households
in main
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street
and 5
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households
in Oak
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street
. After a construction completion, the neighbor had a new look and it had
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little bit
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different
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than
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before
. Two on three the
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forest
and
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stores
were
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changed
by the new shopping center and behind it was parking
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lot
.
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,
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mall
which was
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located
in northwest and parking
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lot
was
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located
in Southeast. One on four the
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households
was developed
and
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changed
into another parking
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lot
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to served
the customers who go to shopping
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mall
.
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Finally
all the
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household
near Oak
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street
weren’t
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changed
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows a neighborhood before and after a mall was constructed

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