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The changes in then place of queen mary hospital in the year's 1960,1980,2000

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The diagrams illustrate a variety of alterations of the place at queen mary hospital in 1980 and 2000 since it was built in 1960. Looking from an overall perspective, it is conspicuous that there were a spectacular developments over the time period. As can be seen when it was constructed there was a shopping centre which had been demolished to make way for cancer centre and pharmacy in 1980. It should be noted that the hospital and pharmacy remained relatively the same in the past 4 decades. Furthermore, the farmland was converted into a nursing school. In addition, there was a car park, located nearby the hospital and which was reduced in size in the year 2000. Moreover, it is apparently seen that the cancer centre was extended to cover entire nursing school in 2000.
The diagrams illustrate a variety of alterations of the place at queen
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mary
hospital in 1980 and 2000 since it
was built
in 1960.

Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is conspicuous that there were a spectacular developments over the time period.

As can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
when it
was constructed
there was a shopping
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
which had
been demolished
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
way for cancer
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
and pharmacy in 1980. It should
be noted
that the hospital and pharmacy remained
relatively
the same in the past 4 decades.

Furthermore
, the farmland
was converted
into a nursing school.
In addition
, there was a car park, located nearby the hospital and which was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
in size in the year 2000.
Moreover
, it is
apparently
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
that the cancer
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
was extended
to cover entire nursing school in 2000.
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IELTS academic The changes in then place of queen mary hospital in the year's 1960, 1980, 2000

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