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The table gives information about how many people visiting Ashdown Museum within 2 years, before and after its refurbishment whilst the pie chart illustrates the percentage of visitors asked about their satisfaction with their trip in the same two periods.

The table gives information about how many people visiting Ashdown Museum within 2 years, before and after its refurbishment whilst the pie chart illustrates the percentage of visitors asked about their satisfaction with their trip in the same two periods. YoOr
The table gives information about how many people visiting Ashdown Museum within 2 years, before and after its refurbishment whilst the pie chart illustrates the percentage of visitors asked about their satisfaction with their trip in the same two periods. Generally, there was a significant increase in the number of visitors after the refurbishment. Meanwhile, the results of surveys of visitor satisfaction also witnessed considerable improvements related to the visitors’ good feedback. Particularly, the quantities of people setting foot in the museum rose by 18, 000, from 74, 000 before and 92, 000 after refurbishment. The increase helped the museum take a sanguine view of visitors’ satisfaction with their trip when the proportions of those who felt very satisfied and satisfy after revamp went up greatly. Specifically, the figure for the first rate criteria just accounted for 15% before the renovation, then more than doubled to 35% later while the numbers for the second were 30% and 40%, respectively. Meanwhile, an inverse trend in the ratio of visitors feeling dissatisfied and very dissatisfied after refurbishment underwent when just 15% and 5% of those who opined that although the previous figures for those were up to 40% and 10%, respectively. Eventually, the number for people having no response stayed static during the surveyed period, with just 5%.
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Ashdown
Museum within 2 years,
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before
and after its
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refurbishment
whilst the pie chart illustrates the percentage of
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visitors
asked about their satisfaction with their trip in the same two periods.

Generally
, there was a significant increase in the number of
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visitors
after the
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refurbishment
. Meanwhile, the results of surveys of
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visitor
satisfaction
also
witnessed considerable improvements related to the
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visitors’
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good
feedback.

Particularly
, the quantities of
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people
setting foot in the museum rose by 18, 000, from 74, 000
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before
and 92, 000 after
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refurbishment
. The increase
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helped
the museum take a sanguine view of
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visitors’
satisfaction with their trip when the proportions of those who felt
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very
satisfied and satisfy after revamp went up
greatly
.
Specifically
, the figure for the
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first rate
criteria
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just
accounted for 15%
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before
the renovation, then more than doubled to 35% later while the numbers for the second were 30% and 40%,
respectively
.

Meanwhile, an inverse trend in the ratio of
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visitors
feeling dissatisfied and
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very
dissatisfied after
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refurbishment
underwent when
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just
15% and 5% of those who opined that although the previous figures for those were up to 40% and 10%,
respectively
.
Eventually
, the number for
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people
having no response stayed static during the surveyed period, with
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just
5%.
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IELTS academic The table gives information about how many people visiting Ashdown Museum within 2 years, before and after its refurbishment whilst the pie chart illustrates the percentage of visitors asked about their satisfaction with their trip in the same two periods.

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