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The line graph compares the average intake in a nation in Europe between 1979 and 2004 of fish and three kinds of meat namely chicken, lamb and beef

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The line graph compares the average intake in a nation in Europe between 1979 and 2004 of fish and three kinds of meat namely chicken, lamb and beef As can be seen from the graph, the amount of chicken consumed throughout the period witnessed an upward trend, whereas beef and lamb had a significant decreasing tendency. In addition, the line for fishes gradually went down but not as much as beef and lamb. In 1979, Beef was by far the most prevalent kind of food, started at around 220 grams per person per week. Despite reached a peak at about 240 grams, the figures then fell sharply to just over 100 grams at the end of the period. Similarly, the consumption of lamb began at 150 grams per person per week. The figure then steady fell and reached only over 50 grams in the year 2004. The consumption of fish also declined, but much less remarkably to just below 50 grams, so although it remained the least popular food, consumption levels were the most stable in contrast, Chicken was the third most eaten meat in 1979, averaging fewer than 150 grams per person per week. The consumption of chicken showed an upward trend over a 25 - year period, overtaking that of lamb in1980 and that of beef in 1989. By 2004 it had soared to almost 250 grams per person per week.
The line graph compares the average intake in a nation in Europe between 1979 and 2004 of fish and three kinds of meat
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lamb
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from the graph, the amount of chicken consumed throughout the period witnessed an upward trend, whereas
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and
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had a significant decreasing tendency.
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In 1979,
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was by far the most prevalent kind of food,
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at around 220
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. Despite reached a peak at about 240
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grams
, the figures then fell
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over 100
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began at 150
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. The figure then steady fell and reached
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in the year 2004. The
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contrast, Chicken was the third most eaten meat in 1979, averaging fewer than 150
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in1980 and that of
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in 1989. By 2004 it had soared to almost 250
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IELTS academic The line graph compares the average intake in a nation in Europe between 1979 and 2004 of fish and three kinds of meat namely chicken, lamb and beef

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