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The given pie charts compare the changes of energy consumption in a particular country over the 20 period years.

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The given pie charts compare the changes in energy consumption in a particular country over the 20 period years. Overall, The production of oil energy made up the highest percentage. By contrast, the proportion of hydropower accounted for the smallest proportion. In 1983, about 42% of energy was produced from oil, the figure for hydropowers was considerably lower, at 4%. Over the next 20 years, there was a slight drop of 4% in the production of energy from oil, whereas the proportion of energy produced from hydropower stayed relatively stable. Turning to the remaining categories of energy, we can see that the production of energy from coal accounted for 23%, was minimally higher than that of gas and nuclear, at 11% and 20% respectively in 1983. Between 1983 and 2003, the figure for coal use for energy production declined significantly by 10%, while consumption coal witnessed a rise in its proportion by a similar amount. There was a slight rise of 4% in the production of energy from nuclear power.
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consumption in a particular country over the 20 period years.

Overall
, The
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of oil
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energy
made up the highest percentage. By contrast, the proportion of hydropower accounted for the smallest proportion.

In 1983, about 42% of
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was produced
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hydropowers
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production
of
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energy
from oil, whereas the proportion of
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produced from hydropower stayed
relatively
stable.

Turning to the remaining categories of
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energy
, we can
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that the
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production
of
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energy
from coal accounted for 23%, was
minimally
higher than that of gas and nuclear, at 11% and 20%
respectively
in 1983. Between 1983 and 2003, the figure for coal
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energy
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production
declined
significantly
by 10%, while consumption coal witnessed a rise in its proportion by a similar amount. There was a slight rise of 4% in the
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production
of
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from nuclear power.
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IELTS academic The given pie charts compare the changes of energy consumption in a particular country over the 20 period years.

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