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The table compares the proportion of the population in one town who cycled in 2011, according to five age groups.

The table compares the proportion of the population in one town who cycled in 2011, according to five age groups. Rw2YM
The table compares the proportion of the population in one town who cycled in 2011, according to five age groups. Overall, it is clear that in all groups, the percentage of female cyclists was higher than male cyclists. However, for both genders, the proportion of population who rode bicycles was the lowest between the ages of 18 and 59. Just over half of all females and males rode bicycles in the age group 0-9, this proportion remained high among 10-17 year old girls, at about 42%. However, among boys aged 10-17, the percentage who cycled declined by over half to less than 25 %. The figures of the 18-39 and 40-59 year old are much lower. In the former age group, only about 17% of women cycled, compared with just under 10% of men. Between the ages of 40 and 59, the figures fell further, to a little over 12% for women and 8 per cent for men. However, the percentage of those over 60 who rode bicycles then rose significantly, reaching 18. 5 % for women compared with around 13% for men.
The table compares the proportion of the population in one town
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cycled in 2011, according to five
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groups.

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, it is
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that in all groups, the percentage of female cyclists was higher than male cyclists.
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, for both genders, the proportion of population
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rode bicycles was the lowest between the
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of 18 and 59.

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half of all females and males rode bicycles in the
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group 0-9, this proportion remained high among 10-17 year
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old
girls, at about 42%.
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, among boys aged 10-17, the percentage
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cycled declined by
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half to less than 25 %.

The figures of the 18-39 and 40-59 year
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are much lower. In the former
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group,
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about 17% of women cycled, compared with
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under 10% of
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men
. Between the
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of 40 and 59, the figures fell
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, to a
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over
12% for women and 8 per cent for
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men
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However
, the percentage of those
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60
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who
rode bicycles then rose
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men
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IELTS academic The table compares the proportion of the population in one town who cycled in 2011, according to five age groups.

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