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Birth rates of China and the USA?

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The line graph gives information about changes in the birth rates of China and the USA from 1920 to 2000. Overall, the birth rates of both nations decreased over 80 years. Although the two trends were similar in term of a general decline, The birth rates of the USA in most years was higher than that China’s Looking at the chart in more detail, Between 1920 and 1935, The birth rates in the USA increased slightly from 10% to 12%. Similarly, There was minimal growth to about 15% in China in the same period. In the 1945s, the birth rates of the US remained stable at 5%. By contrast, there was a decrease to 5% in the birth rates of China. During the 1950s, The birth rates of China increased dramatically by 20%, higher than that of the USA. While five years later, In the 2000s, the birth rates of China declined significantly at 7% and dropped dramatically to 2% in the birth rates of the USA
The line graph gives information about
changes
in the
birth
rates
of China and the USA from 1920 to 2000.

Overall
, the
birth
rates
of both nations decreased over 80 years. Although the two trends were similar in term of a general decline, The
birth
rates
of the USA in most years was higher than that China’s

Looking at the chart in more detail, Between 1920 and 1935, The
birth
rates
in the USA increased
slightly
from 10% to 12%.
Similarly
, There was minimal growth to about 15% in China in the same period. In the 1945s, the
birth
rates
of the US remained stable at 5%. By contrast, there was a decrease to 5% in the
birth
rates
of China.

During the 1950s, The
birth
rates
of China increased
dramatically
by 20%, higher than that of the USA. While five years later, In the 2000s, the
birth
rates
of China declined
significantly
at 7% and dropped
dramatically
to 2% in the
birth
rates
of the
USA
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Academic
  American English
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166 words
6.5
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