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The table chart shows the participation in cultural activities,by age.

The table chart shows the participation in cultural activities, by age. 5372n
The provided table chart illustrate the information about the people of different age group who took part in the distinct cultural activities. Overview, it is clearly visible that maximum proportion of individuals participated in the various performances whereas, people participated in writing were least of three age groups. To begin with, 35% and 22% of people were contribute who belongs to 16-24, 25-44 and all aged 16 respectively whereas, 45-74 age group engaged as 17% to perform as extra curriculum activities. Moreover, same value of youngsters and adults had participated in crafts and cultural purchases as 11% and 17% while, interest of 45-74 years people were more as 22% in crafts although contribution of all aged 16 and over were reach to 19%. Along with this, cultural purchases followed decreased trend 45-74 and above with 18% and 16%.
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