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The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007.

The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007. qpdX
The table gives information about several laptop and notebook companies’ global market share between 2006 and 2007. Overall, Dell, HP, and Toshiba experienced a small growth, while the market shares of Fujitsu-Siemens, Acer, Lenovo, and other manufactures decreased slightly. On one hand, the market shares of Dell, HP, and Toshiba went up marginally during the period given and they also predominated by more than half combined in each year to other companies. There was a small increase in Dell’s market share by around 4%, from 16. 6% to 20. 2%. HP followed by the addition of more than 3% in their market share, from 31. 4% to exactly 34%. However, Toshiba experienced the smallest growth by only around 1%, from 6. 2% to 7. 3%. On the other hand, Fujitsu-Siemens, Acer, Lenovo, and other companies' market shares declined in 2007 compared to 2006. In fact, Fujitsu-Siemens was the company with the highest adverse by more than 2%, from 4. 8% to only 2. 3%, the lowest in 2017. Acer and Lenovo's market shares were fell by less than 1%, from 11. 6% to 10. 7% (Acer) and 6. 6% to 6. 2% for the latter. Meanwhile, the other companies’ market share went down by 2. 5%, from 22. 8% to 19. 3%.
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between 2006 and 2007.
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of Fujitsu-Siemens, Acer, Lenovo, and
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of Dell, HP, and Toshiba went up
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by around 4%, from 16. 6% to 20. 2%. HP followed by the addition of more than 3% in their
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, from 31. 4% to exactly 34%.
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around 1%, from 6. 2% to 7. 3%.

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declined in 2007 compared to 2006. In fact, Fujitsu-Siemens was the
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with the highest adverse by more than 2%, from 4. 8% to
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2. 3%, the lowest in 2017. Acer and Lenovo's
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were fell by less than 1%, from 11. 6% to 10. 7% (Acer) and 6. 6% to 6. 2% for the latter. Meanwhile, the
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went down by 2. 5%, from 22. 8% to 19. 3%.
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IELTS academic The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007.

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