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The graph shows the consumption of three spreads from 1981 to 2008

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The tables illustrate the output of a survey done on six aspects(eductaion, healthcare, environment, shops, employment and transport) with ratings(good, neither good nor bad and bad) for a city in 1980 and 2010. All the units are measured in percentage. Overall, the amount of bad percentage for city has increased over 20 years span for all aspects, while the good percentage has increased only in edcuation and employment aspect. The city is good in terms of education but has not been able to produce good results when it comes to employment when comparing 1980 and 2010 survey results. In 1980, healthcare(82%) had the more likehood than any other aspects. Education and environment were at the second spot with 72% of good aspect. On the other hand, transport(38%) had higest bad aspect, while around quater of people didn't had a either good or bad opinion for shops(24%). In 2010, there were more people having either good or bad opnions. Eduction(82%) had the highest votes for good, while transport beacame more worse when compared to 1980 which was 38% in 2010. Employment saw a 10% increase in city. Furthermore, the likehood healthcare had a major drop of 8%. The environment had a slight drop of 1%.
The tables illustrate the output of a survey done on six aspects(
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eductaion
, healthcare, environment, shops,
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employment
and transport) with ratings(
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good
, neither
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good
nor
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bad
and
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bad)
for a city in 1980 and 2010. All the units
are measured
in percentage.

Overall
, the amount of
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bad
percentage for city has increased over 20 years span for all
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aspects
, while the
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good
percentage has increased
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only
in
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edcuation
and
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employment
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aspect
. The city is
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good
in terms of education
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but
has not been able to produce
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good
results when it
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comes
to
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employment
when comparing 1980 and 2010 survey results.

In 1980, healthcare(82%) had the more
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likehood
than any other
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aspects
. Education and environment were at the second spot with 72% of
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good
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aspect
.
On the other hand
, transport(38%) had
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higest
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bad
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aspect
, while around
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quater
of
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people
didn't
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had
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a
either
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good
or
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bad
opinion for shops(24%).

In 2010, there were more
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people
having either
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good
or
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bad
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opnions
.
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Eduction
(82%) had the highest votes for
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good
, while transport
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beacame
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more worse
when compared to 1980 which was 38% in 2010.
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Employment
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saw
a 10% increase in city.
Furthermore
, the
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likehood
healthcare had a major drop of 8%. The environment had a slight drop of 1%.

IELTS academic The graph shows the consumption of three spreads from 1981 to 2008

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