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The table below shows the unemployment rates in 2000 for men and women in different parts of the world. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The table below shows the unemployment rates in 2000 for men and women in different parts of the world. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. jdkJ1
the chart below illustrates the unemployed proportion of both genders between 5 countries in 2000. overall, it is immediately obvious that some developing countries as Morocco and Belize registered higher rates compared to countries that already possessed development. It is clear that Morroco has the highest unemployment rate at 22% on average, which was followed by Belize at 12, 7% for both sexes. In both countries, the woman has more tendency to be unemployed than man, In Morocco, the figure is 27, 6% and 20, 3% and with Belize, it is 20, 3% and 8, 8% respectively. In contrast, in some developed countries, the unemployment percentages are likely to be much lower. for instance, only 3, 3% are reported in Netherlands citizens, 4, 7% in Japan, and 6, 5% in Australia who don't have any works ( on average). Furthermore, except for the Netherlands, these countries have more unemployed men than women. The proportion of unemployment among men in Australia is 6, 7% compared to 6, 5% of women. A similar trend was witnessed in Japan with the figure of unemployed males is 4, 9%, which was a little bit higher than the female(4, 5%). However, in the Netherlands, the percentage of women who have no career is twice as the figure of men(4, 2% and 2, 6%).
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proportion of both genders between 5
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in 2000.

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overall
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developing
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as Morocco and Belize registered higher rates compared to
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that already possessed development.

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Morroco
has the highest unemployment rate at 22% on average, which
was followed
by Belize at 12, 7% for both sexes. In both
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, the woman has more tendency to be
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than
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man
, In Morocco, the figure is 27, 6% and 20, 3% and with Belize, it is 20, 3% and 8, 8%
respectively
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, the unemployment percentages are likely to be much lower.
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in Netherlands citizens, 4, 7% in Japan, and 6, 5% in Australia who don't have any works
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the Netherlands, these
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have more
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than women. The proportion of unemployment among
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in Australia is 6, 7% compared to 6, 5% of women. A similar trend
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males is 4, 9%, which was a
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higher than the female(4, 5%).
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