Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The table below shows the unemployement rates in 2000 for men and women

The table below shows the unemployement rates in 2000 for men and women Eq5Db
The graph shows information about how many both genders were unemployed in different countries in 2000. Overall, what stands out from the graph is that, a number of developing countries as Morocco and Belize registered higher rates compared to possessed development. It can be seen that Morocco has the highest unemployment rate at 22% on average, which was followed by Belize at 12, 7% for both sexes. In all most countries, women have more tendency to be unemployed than men. In Morocco, the figure is 27, 6% and 20, 3% and with Belize, it is 20, 3% and 8, 8% respectively. In contrast, in some undeveloped countries, the proportion of unemployment are likely to be much lower. For instance, only 3, 3% are reported in Netherlands, 4, 7% in Japan, and 6, 5% in Australia don’t have any works. Furthermore, except Netherlands, these countries have more unemployed men than women. The rate among men in Australia is 6, 7% compared to 6, 5% of women. A similar trend was witnessed in Japan with the figure of unemployed males is 4, 9%, which was higher than the female(4, 5%). In Netherlands, the proportion of women who have no career is twice as much as the figure of men, with figures 4, 2% and 2, 6%.
The graph
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
information about how
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
both genders were
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
unemployed
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
in 2000.

Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that, a number of developing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
as Morocco and Belize registered higher rates compared to possessed development.

It can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
that Morocco has the highest unemployment rate at 22% on average, which
was followed
by Belize at 12, 7% for both sexes. In all most
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
have more tendency to be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
unemployed
than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
men
. In Morocco, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
figure
is 27, 6% and 20, 3% and with Belize, it is 20, 3% and 8, 8%
respectively
.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
contrast, in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
undeveloped
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
, the proportion of unemployment are likely to be much lower.
For instance
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
3, 3%
are reported
A determiner is probably missing here: "in the Netherlands".
in Netherlands
, 4, 7% in Japan, and 6, 5% in Australia don’t have any works.
Furthermore
,
A determiner is probably missing here: "except the Netherlands".
except Netherlands
, these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
have more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
unemployed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
men
than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
. The rate among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
men
in Australia is 6, 7% compared to 6, 5% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
. A similar trend
was witnessed
in Japan with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
figure
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
unemployed
males is 4, 9%, which was higher than the female(4, 5%).
A determiner is probably missing here: "In the Netherlands".
In Netherlands
, the proportion of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
who have no career is twice as much as the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
figure
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
men
, with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
figures
4, 2% and 2, 6%.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The table below shows the unemployement rates in 2000 for men and women

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
214 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts