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In terms of the gender distribution, men outnumbered women in all years except 1861, when there were 131,780 men as compared to 160,000 women. By 1901, the gap between the genders too had narrowed substantially (31,000 men and 30,000 women). Finally, the total number of factories showed a fluctuating trend. There were 225 factories in Britain and Wales in 1851. This number surged to 721 in 1881 and then dropped to 600 by 1901.

In terms of the gender distribution, men outnumbered women in all years except 1861, when there were 131, 780 men as compared to 160, 000 women. By 1901, the gap between the genders too had narrowed substantially (31, 000 men and 30, 000 women). Finally, the total number of factories showed a fluctuating trend. There were 225 factories in Britain and Wales in 1851. This number surged to 721 in 1881 and then dropped to 600 by 1901. X7w5E
The given table illustrates the figures for male and female workers, and manufacturing units in England and Wales in 10 year intervals starting from 1851 to 1901. Overall, the number of factory workers dropped steadily throughout the given period and males outnumbered females in most years. Moreover, the number of factories saw a fluctuating trend in England and Wales. Looking at the table in more detail, there were 477, 100 employees in British and Welsh factories in 1851. However by 1901, this number had plummeted to just 61, 000, registering a drop each year. In terms of the gender distribution, men outnumbered women in all years except 1861, when there were 131, 780 men as compared to 160, 000 women. By 1901, the gap between the genders too had narrowed substantially (31, 000 men and 30, 000 women). Finally, the total number of factories showed a fluctuating trend. There were 225 factories in Britain and Wales in 1851. This number surged to 721 in 1881 and then dropped to 600 by 1901.
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intervals starting from 1851 to 1901.

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workers dropped
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period and males outnumbered females in most years.
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a fluctuating trend in England and Wales.

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in 1851.
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by 1901, this
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had plummeted to
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61, 000, registering a drop each
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. In terms of the gender distribution,
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outnumbered women in all years except 1861, when there were 131, 780
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as compared to 160, 000 women. By 1901, the gap between the genders too had narrowed
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and 30, 000 women).

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in Britain and Wales in 1851. This
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surged to 721 in 1881 and then dropped to 600 by 1901.
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IELTS academic In terms of the gender distribution, men outnumbered women in all years except 1861, when there were 131, 780 men as compared to 160, 000 women. By 1901, the gap between the genders too had narrowed substantially (31, 000 men and 30, 000 women). Finally, the total number of factories showed a fluctuating trend. There were 225 factories in Britain and Wales in 1851. This number surged to 721 in 1881 and then dropped to 600 by 1901.

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