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The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.

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The production of cement involves a 5 stage, linear process that begins with the mixing of raw materials and culminates in the packaging of new cement. Making concrete is a simpler process that involves mixing four ingredients in a concrete mixer. Limestone and clay are crushed and the resulting powder is then mixed before being passed through a rotating heater. Once heated this mixture travels over a conveyor belt and is ground through a grinder. Now that the cement has been produced, it is packaged and transported to a building site where it can be used to make concrete. Concrete is made up of half gravel, quarter sand, 10% water and 15% cement. All of these are added together in a cylindrical drum and rotated until concrete is yielded.
The production of
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cement
involves a 5 stage, linear process that
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begins
with the mixing of raw materials and culminates in the packaging of new
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cement
. Making concrete is a simpler process that involves mixing four ingredients in a concrete mixer.

Limestone and clay
are crushed
and the resulting powder is then mixed
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before
being passed
through a rotating heater. Once heated this mixture travels over a conveyor belt and
is ground
through a grinder.
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Now
that the
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cement
has
been produced
, it
is packaged
and transported to a building site where it can be
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used
to
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make
concrete.

Concrete
is made
up of half gravel, quarter sand, 10% water and 15%
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cement
. All of these are
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added
together in a cylindrical drum and rotated until concrete
is yielded
.
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IELTS academic The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
129 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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