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The table below shows the salaries of secondary/high school teachers in 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The data summary reveals the amount of salaries for the secondary or high school teachers in the year 2009. The comparision involves five different countries explaining thier starting salary and the maximum salary which they can acheive with the time frame of the same. First of all the starting salary of the Australia is the lowest when compared to all other countries followed by Korea and Japan. Luxembourg has slightly higher salary has the highest paying starting salary among the group which is accompanied next by denmark. Despite the higher initial salary in Denmark the salary after 15 years is quite low which is only 6000 dearer than that of Australia. It is also noticable that the Denmark and Australia are the only countries which provides the highest salary after 9 and 8 years respectively. whereas to acheive the highest salary in Japan it takes 37 Years. Eventhough Luxembourgh had the highest salary after 15 years it takes another one and half decade to reach the maximum salary. And the japan have the highest growth between the 15 years to the maximum Salary,
The data summary reveals the amount of
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for the secondary or high school teachers in the
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2009. The
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comparision
involves five
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countries explaining
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starting
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and the maximum
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which they can
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acheive
with the time frame of the same.

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the starting
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of the Australia is the lowest when compared to all other countries followed by Korea and Japan. Luxembourg has
slightly
higher
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has the highest paying starting
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among the group which
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denmark
.

Despite the higher initial
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in Denmark the
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after 15 years is quite low which is
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6000 dearer than that of Australia. It is
also
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noticable
that the Denmark and Australia are the
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countries which provides the highest
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after 9 and 8 years
respectively
.
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whereas
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acheive
the highest
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in Japan it takes 37 Years.

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Luxembourgh
had the highest
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after 15 years it takes another one and half decade to reach the maximum
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salary
. And the
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have the highest growth between the 15 years to the maximum
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IELTS academic The table below shows the salaries of secondary/high school teachers in 2009.

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