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The pie charts illustrate the changes in energy production from five different sources (oil, natural gas, hydroelectric power and nuclear power) for the USA in two different years (1980 and 1990).

The pie charts illustrate the changes in energy production from five different sources (oil, natural gas, hydroelectric power and nuclear power) for the USA in two different years (1980 and 1990). Overall, oil constituted the main source of energy production in both years, while hydroelectric power produced the least energy. There was a single decrease in production from oil and natural gas, whereas an increase can be seen in the figure for coal and nuclear power. The amount of energy produced by oil in the USA was 42% in 1980 and this, then declined to a third (33%) in 1990. The proportion of energy from hydroelectric power, on the other hand remained constant in both years at a mere 5%. The energy generated by natural gas, which was the second largest source of energy in the USA in 1980, fell by 1% to a quarter of all energy produced in 1990. In contrast, production by coal rose from 22% to 27% in 1990. While there was a 5% increase in energy from nuclear power to reach 10% in the second year.
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(oil
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power)
for the USA in two
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years (1980 and 1990).

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oil
constituted the main source of
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energy
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production
in both years, while hydroelectric
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power
produced the least
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energy
. There was a single decrease in
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production
from
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oil
and natural gas, whereas an increase can be
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seen
in the figure for coal and nuclear power.

The amount of
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energy
produced by
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oil
in the USA was 42% in 1980 and this, then declined to a third (33%) in 1990. The proportion of
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energy
from hydroelectric
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power
,
on the other hand
remained constant in both years at a mere 5%.

The
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energy
generated by natural gas, which was the second largest source of
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energy
in the USA in 1980, fell by 1% to a quarter of all
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energy
produced in 1990.
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,
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production
by coal rose from 22% to 27% in 1990.
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from nuclear
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power
to reach 10% in the second
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year
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IELTS academic The pie charts illustrate the changes in energy production from five different sources (oil, natural gas, hydroelectric power and nuclear power) for the USA in two different years (1980 and 1990).

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