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The table below shows the result of a survey to find out what members of a city sports club think about the club's activities,facilities and opening hours.

The table below shows the result of a survey to find out what members of a city sports club think about the club's activities, facilities and opening hours. Gxro
The table depicts the outcome of a survey to find out what groups of a community sports club feel about the club's activities, amenities and opeining hours. The data are measured in pecentage. Overall, it can be seen that female members were significant reason in opening hours, while the least activity was not satisfied as shown in figure. To begin with, in terms of range of activities, women were accounted for similar rates around more than a third, wheras not satisfied were comprised about 30% of activities. While, men had highest portion in very satisfied to more than a half, likewise a tiny fraction of male were not satisfied with occuption. Furthermore, in terms of club activities, girl groups and boys groups have a similar rates for 64% and 65% respectively. Then, male was considerably higher than that female groups in satisfied sectors. In addition, with regards to opening hours, women were very satisfied on hours around a large proportion(72%) opposed to male members were around more than two fifths.
The table depicts the outcome of a survey to find out what
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of a community sports club feel about the club's
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activities
, amenities and
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opeining
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hours
. The data
are measured
in
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pecentage
.

Overall
, it can be
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that female members were significant reason in opening
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hours
, while the least
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activity
was not
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satisfied
as shown in figure.

To
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begin
with, in terms of range of
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activities
, women
were accounted
for similar rates around more than a third,
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wheras
not
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satisfied
were comprised
about 30% of
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activities
. While,
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men
had
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highest
portion in
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very
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satisfied
to more than a half,
likewise
a tiny fraction of male were not
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satisfied
with
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occuption
.

Furthermore
, in terms of club
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activities
, girl
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groups
and boys
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groups
have a similar
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rates
for 64% and 65%
respectively
. Then, male was
considerably
higher than that female
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groups
in
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satisfied
sectors.

In addition
,
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with regards to
opening
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hours
, women were
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very
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satisfied
on
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hours
around a large proportion(72%) opposed to male members were around more than two fifths.

IELTS academic The table below shows the result of a survey to find out what members of a city sports club think about the club's activities, facilities and opening hours.

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170 words
5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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