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The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. kabd
The line graph illustrates the number of birth and demises in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101. The information is provided by thousands and years measured. Overall, it is clear that deaths never decreased, maintaining a constant increment to the future. Births will show a significant variation to the future. To begin with, births showed the lowest rate in 1901, reaching a peak of 70. 000 in 1961. However, the proportion fluctuated before sharply declined to just 50. 000 in 1981, recovering the growth in 2001. Conversely, from the present year to the future, the number of births will dramatically fall, reaching a minimum of just over 40. 000 by the year 2101 This contrast sharply with the number of deaths, therefore, from 1901, the rate slightly varied from 10. 000 to around 30. 000 in 2001. However, from then on, a significant growth is predicted, rising to approximately 60. 000 by 2061. Remarkably, in contrast to births, the number of deaths will stay stable by the year 2101. To summarize, in New Zealand, more deaths will be informed than births.
The line graph illustrates the
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and demises in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101. The information
is provided
by thousands and years measured.

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, it is
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that deaths never decreased, maintaining a constant increment to the future.
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Births
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a significant variation to the future.

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the lowest rate in 1901, reaching a peak of 70. 000 in 1961.
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, the proportion fluctuated
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sharply
declined to
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50. 000 in 1981, recovering the growth in 2001.
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to the future, the
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dramatically
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over 40. 000 by the
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2101

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sharply
with the
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of deaths,
therefore
, from 1901, the rate
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000
in 2001.
However
, from then on, a significant growth
is predicted
, rising to approximately 60. 000 by 2061.
Remarkably
,
in contrast
to
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births
, the
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of deaths will stay stable by the
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2101.

To summarize
, in New Zealand, more deaths will
be informed
than
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births
.
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IELTS academic The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101.

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