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The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015.

The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015. 6r5K
The given table illustrated the percentage of women participating in senior management in Eldan Ltd, Bamforth Ltd and Finsbury Ltd from 1975 to 2015. As the overview, Eldan Ltd had significant role. Because in the begging of the period it showed the fewest percentage and the peak amount depicted in currently. According to the table, in the first three years the biggest value got the Finsbury Ltd, that was 15%. The least contributing of women in 1975 as well as 1980 was 3 percent in Eldan Ltd. It gave one third of Bamforth in 1975. Fourteen percent of women workes as Managers in 1980's. In addition, approximately 12% of portion as in senior position at Bamforth Ltd between 80 and 85. The highest figure showed the Finsbury Ltd of 16% in 1975. Meanwhile, in the last three years Finsbury had a constant percentages, its about 25. Eldan Ltd had been giving a noticeable increment as 28%, 33% and 64% respectively up to 2015. Women were worked in the top level in 1990 to 2000 were 15% and 17% while ultimately, top amount of Bamforth Ltd in 2015 was 46%.
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women
participating in senior management in
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Eldan
Ltd,
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Bamforth
Ltd and
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Finsbury
Ltd from 1975 to 2015.

As the overview,
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Eldan
Ltd had significant role.
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showed
the fewest percentage and the peak amount depicted in
currently
.

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first
three years the biggest value
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got
the
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Finsbury
Ltd, that was 15%. The least contributing of
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women
in 1975
as well
as 1980 was 3 percent in
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Eldan
Ltd. It gave one third of
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Bamforth
in 1975. Fourteen percent of
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women
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workes
as Managers
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in 1980's
.
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, approximately 12% of portion as in senior position at
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Bamforth
Ltd between 80 and 85. The highest figure
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showed
the
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Finsbury
Ltd of 16% in 1975.

Meanwhile, in the last three years
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Finsbury
had a constant
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percentages
,
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about 25.
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Eldan
Ltd had been giving a noticeable increment as 28%, 33% and 64%
respectively
up to 2015.
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Women
were worked
in the
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top level
in 1990 to 2000 were 15% and 17% while
ultimately
, top amount of
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Bamforth
Ltd in 2015 was 46%.
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IELTS academic The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015.

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