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The line graph compares the average price of a barrel of oil with the food price index over a period of 11 years. It is clear that average global prices of both oil and food rose considerably between 2000 and 2011. Furthermore, the trends for bothcommodities were very similar, and so a strong correlation (93. 6%) is suggested. In the year 2000, the average global oil price was close to $25 per barrel, and the food priceindex stood at just under 90 points. Over the following four years both pricesindex stood at just under 90 points. Over the following four years both prices remained relatively stable, before rising steadily between 2004 and 2007. By 2007, the averageoil price had more than doubled, to nearly $60 per barrel, and food prices had risen by around 50 points. A dramatic increase in both commodity prices was seen from 2007 to 2008, with oil prices reaching a peak of approximately $130 per barrel and the food price index rising to 220points. However, by the beginning of 2009 the price of oil had dropped by roughly $90, and the food price index was down by about 80 points. Finally, in 2011, the average oil price rose once again, to nearly $100 per barrel, while the food price index reached its peak, at almost 240 points.
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over a period of 11 years.

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of both oil

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and
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rose
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bothcommodities
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similar, and
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a strong

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correlation
(93. 6%)
is suggested
. In the year 2000, the
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close to $25 per
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, and the
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stood at
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under 90
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. Over the following four years both
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stood at
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under 90
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following four years both
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remained
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between 2004 and 2007. By 2007, the
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had more than doubled, to
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, and
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had risen by around 50
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. A dramatic increase in both commodity
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was
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from 2007 to 2008, with
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reaching a peak of approximately $130 per
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and the
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rising to
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220points
.
However
, by the beginning of 2009 the

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price
of
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had dropped by roughly $90, and the
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was down by about 80
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.
Finally
, in 2011, the
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rose once again, to
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$100 per
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, while the
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reached its peak, at almost 240
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