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the table below shows the numbers of visitors to ASHDOWN museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished.

the table below shows the numbers of visitors to ASHDOWN museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. bKX6

It clearly indicates that post redevelopment the museum has been able to attract more people than it did in its old structure. On the year before reconstruction, 74, 000 individual's had visited out of which only 15% found worth visiting. 30% visitors were convinced with the previous one. A decent number, that is 2/5th of the total were not satisfied with the place. Out of every 10 individuals 1 were disappointed when they came across the museum. 5% were not interested in giving their response. On the other hand, the number of commuters increased by approximately 25% to 94, 000. This was mainly because of developments which took place. A massive spike of 20% was seen amongst people who found the place worth visiting totaling it to 35%. The new structure was found to be convincing by every 4 out of 10 people who visited the new design. The dissatisfied crowd decreased significantly by 25% to a total of 15% than 40% which was the number before reconstruction. 1/20th of the people where very disheartened with new design and same was the figure who didn't want to respond.

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