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The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and year after It was refurbished. The charts showed a result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and year after It was refurbished. The charts showed a result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. arlo
The table represents the number of visits done to the Ashdown Museum before and after the refurbishment, whereas the pie charts demonstrate the outcomes of the survey conducted to determine the level of satisfaction in two time zones. Overall, it can be explicitly observed that the total number of visitors expanded after the refurbishment along that more than half of them were satisfied, with not very satisfied with the changes. In regards to the table, before the refurbishment, 74, 000 people came to the museum, however later, the numbers soared by 18, 000 just after the refurbishment. Turning to the pie charts, the levels of satisfaction rose dramatically after the refurbishment, that is, 45% to 75%. Moreover, dissatisfaction levels plummeted to 15%, which earlier was almost three times more. Similarly, a decrease of 50% in very dissatisfied rates was noticed, which transformed from 10% to 5%; meanwhile, a number of responses remained static, namely, 5%.
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observed that the total
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after the refurbishment.

Turning to the pie charts, the levels of satisfaction rose
dramatically
after the
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,
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, 45% to 75%.
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, dissatisfaction levels plummeted to 15%, which earlier was almost three times more.
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, which transformed from 10% to 5%; meanwhile, a
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of responses remained static,
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IELTS academic The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and year after It was refurbished. The charts showed a result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

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