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The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished

The table below illustrates the total number of visitors who visited to Ashdown museum before and after the year it was renovated. Overall, we observe that higher proportion of visitors visit during the year after renovation. Firstly, before the recreation only 74, 000 people visited to Ashdown Museum whereas, there is a rise in number which reaches up to 92, 000, respectively after the refurbishment
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and after the year it
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, we observe that higher proportion of visitors visit during the year after renovation.

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the recreation
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74, 000
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Ashdown
Museum whereas, there is a rise in number which reaches up to 92, 000,
respectively
after the refurbishment
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IELTS academic The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished

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