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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1

The line graph illustrates the unemployment rate in both the rural and urban areas in Australia during the fisrt four months of the year 2012. Overall, it can be seen that the unemployment rate was higher in the rural areas of Australia than it is in the urban areas. In additon, it can be acknowledged that the percentage of unemployed people in rural areas decreased over the fisrt four month unlike that in urban areas where it increased. To begin with, looking at the line graph that concrens the unemployment rate in rural areas, it was merely 6. 5% at the begining of the year. However, this number detoriarated to around 4. 5% with the starting of the third month prior to increasing slightly to attain exactly 5% at the end of the fourth month. On the other hand, concerning unemployment rate in urban areas, it was just above 2% at the start of the year. Nonetheless, this proportion climbed to 4% with the end of month four and kept increasing during month five yet staying under 5%.
The line graph illustrates the
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unemployment
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rate
in both the
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rural
and
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urban
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areas
in Australia during the
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fisrt
four
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months
of the year 2012.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that the
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unemployment
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rate
was higher in the
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rural
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areas
of Australia than it is in the
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urban
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areas
. In
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additon
, it can
be acknowledged
that the percentage of unemployed
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people
in
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rural
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areas
decreased over the
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fisrt
four
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month
unlike that in
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urban
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areas
where it increased.

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begin
with, looking at the line graph that
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concrens
the
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unemployment
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rate
in
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rural
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areas
, it was
merely
6. 5%

at the
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begining
of the year.
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, this number
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detoriarated
to around 4. 5% with the starting of the third
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month
prior to increasing
slightly
to attain exactly 5% at the
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end
of the fourth month.

On the other hand
, concerning
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unemployment
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rate
in
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urban
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areas
, it was
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just
above 2% at the
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start
of the year. Nonetheless, this proportion climbed to 4% with the
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end
of
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month
four and
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kept
increasing during
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month
five
yet
staying under 5%.

IELTS academic The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
178 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1