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The table below shows some data regarding Australia's nursing employment and total workforce in 1987 and 2001.

The table compares four different position of nursing service statistics relating to Australia's treatment job and total strength in 1987 and 2001. As can be seen from the data, the chief of nursing strength was increased, but other three position of nursing number are decreased, however the total nursing employment was decreased while total strength were very increased. In 1987, the head of nursing number was 4000, while 5200 number of nursing of director in 2001.
The table compares four
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position of nursing service statistics relating to Australia's treatment job and total strength in 1987 and 2001. As can be
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from the data, the chief of nursing strength
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other three position of nursing number
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the total nursing employment
was decreased
while total strength were
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increased. In 1987, the head of nursing number was 4000, while 5200 number of nursing of director in 2001.
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IELTS academic The table below shows some data regarding Australia's nursing employment and total workforce in 1987 and 2001.

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