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The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. v.5

The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. v. 5
Data presented in the table shows four social and economic indicators in the year 1994 for Canada, Japan, Peru and Zaire, based on the statistics of the UN. As is observed from the given data, Japan and Canada had far better economic conditions than the other two countries. According to the table data, Japan had the highest per capita income (annually over 15 thousand US dollar) while Peru and Zaire had fewer per person income (just over 100 USD) in 1994. Canada held the second position in this economic indicator with over 11 thousand per person annual income. Again, life expectancy in Japan and Canada was far better than the other two countries. While the Japanese population had a 78 years life expectancy, people of Peru and Zaire had a life expectancy of 50 years at the birth time. Canadian and Japanese had plenty of daily calories supply (around 3000 calories per day for individual person) while Peru and Zaire managed to have less than 2 thousand daily calorie supply per person. For the final economic and social indicator of these four countries, literacy rates in Japan and Canada were far better than the other two countries. Peru managed to have over 50% literacy rates while almost a two-third population of Zaire was illiterate.
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four social and
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economic
indicators in the year 1994 for Canada,
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Japan
, Peru and Zaire, based on the statistics of the UN. As
is observed
from the
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data,
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Japan
and Canada had far better
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economic
conditions than the other two countries.

According to the table data,
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Japan
had the highest per capita income (
annually
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over
15 thousand US
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dollar
) while Peru and Zaire had fewer per
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person
income (
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just
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over
100 USD) in 1994. Canada held the second position in this
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economic
indicator with
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over
11 thousand per
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person
annual income. Again, life expectancy in
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Japan
and Canada was far better than the other two countries. While the Japanese population had a 78 years life expectancy,
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people
of Peru and Zaire had a life expectancy of 50 years at the birth time.

Canadian and Japanese had
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plenty
of daily calories supply (around 3000 calories per day for individual
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person)
while Peru and Zaire managed to have less than 2 thousand daily calorie supply per
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person
. For the final
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economic
and social indicator of these four countries, literacy rates in
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Japan
and Canada were far better than the other two countries. Peru managed to have
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over
50% literacy rates while almost a two-third population of Zaire was illiterate.
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IELTS academic The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. v. 5

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