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The table below shows information and prediction regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries

The present table illustrates the data and forecast, in respect to the difference in percentage of the density of people aged 65 and above in Canada, Germany and UK. Overall, it is evident that UK had almost same percentage in 1988 and 2000. On closer observation, it is it is visible that in the three given years, Canada and Germany had same trend of increase in nearly 5% in each given year. Significantly, Canada had 16. 32% in 1988 likewise in year 2000 it had 5% increase of 20. 67 percent, Furthermore, in the future year 2030 it might have 20. 63%. Simultaneously, Germany follows the same pattern with 20. 45% population of age 65 and above in 1988, followed by year 2000 the percentage increased with 5% that is 25. 32% and in the next upcoming year mentioned 2030 it will grow up to 30. 42%. Germany remains with highest population of age 65 an above among the three countries given. On the other hand UK has set a different range than Canada and Germany such as in 1988 the UK population age span of 65 and above was 14. 23% subsequently, which almost remained same in the given next year 2000 whereas, in the future allocated year the population density surge increases with 5%, which amounts to 20. 35%.
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2030 it might have 20. 63%.
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IELTS academic The table below shows information and prediction regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries

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