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the bar chart shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States,Canada,the United Kingdom,and Japan in the year 2009

The bar chart compares how much money spent on several categories: housing, transportation, health care and clothing by the consumers in four different countries in 2009. Overall, the largest proportion of people expenditures in each country went on housing, food as well as transportation. On the other hand, healthcare and clothing figures had the lowest rates in the chart given. In the terms of figures whose the most expenditures shared, the Americans and Canadians spent well under 15%on food. The British and Japaneese expenditures were prominent (close to 20%)for that category. More than 20% money was spent for housing by the Japaneese and Canadian while the American and British people's spending for it accounted for the highest percent (more than 23%). The Canadian consumers used with bigger level on transportation (20%), whereas the British spent 5%for it less than Canadian. Over 15 percent expenditures were used for transport system by Americans while Japaneese ' was 10%. In 2009, apart from the USA, other countries were not able to spent 5%money on health care. People who lived in Canada and the UK spending on clothing accounted for more than 5%while the Americans and Japaneese shared expenditures less than 5%.
The bar chart compares how much money
spent
on several categories: housing, transportation, health care and clothing by the consumers in four
different
countries in 2009.
Overall
, the largest proportion of
people
expenditures
in each country went on housing, food
as well
as transportation.
On the other hand
, healthcare and clothing figures had the lowest rates in the chart
given
. In the terms of figures
whose
the most
expenditures
shared, the Americans and Canadians
spent
well under 15%on food. The British and
Japaneese
expenditures
were prominent (close to 20%)for that category. More than 20% money was
spent
for housing by the
Japaneese
and Canadian while the American and British
people
's spending for it accounted for the highest percent (more than 23%). The Canadian consumers
used
with bigger level on transportation (20%), whereas the British
spent
5%for it less than Canadian. Over 15 percent
expenditures
were
used
for transport system by Americans while
Japaneese
'
was 10%. In 2009, apart from the USA, other countries were not able to
spent
5%money on health care.
People
who
lived
in Canada and the UK spending on clothing accounted for more than 5%while the Americans and
Japaneese
shared
expenditures
less than 5%.
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IELTS academic the bar chart shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009

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