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The table below gives information on the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets.

The table below gives information on the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. 6xxWl
The pie charts make a comparison between carbohydrates and protein, and fat in three different diets. As can be seen from the graph, the most noticeable trend is carbohydrates, except an average diet while, the proportion of protein and fat contain less than carbohydrates. To begin with, 60% of carbohydrates is consisted of diet for sportspeople, being the biggest figure among other diets. Second diet contains the largest proportion for carbohydrates is healthy diet with 50 %. Following this, the average diet includes with 40%. Turning to the protein and fat sectors, the average and healthy diets have the highest proportions include in the former, for the average 40 %, for the diet for sportspeople health consists of 25%. The proportion of an average and healthy diets contain equal at 20% in fat, while diet with sportspeople health includes at 15%
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IELTS academic The table below gives information on the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets.

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