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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. RNNPk
The line charts compare the university applications of domestic and international students in Australia over a decade. Overalll, it can be clearly seen the figure for overseas enrollments rose over time in term of overall and commencing. On the other hand, the total rate in local students increased. However, the local commencing rate experienced an opposite trend. As the graph shows, total foreign enrollments started at 200, 000 in 2001 followed by a sharp growth to around 800, 000 in 2010. Meanwhile, the graduate portion in overseas students stood approximately at 100, 000. Then there was a moderate rise to 400, 000 in 10 years. By contrast, total and commencing rates in local students show an inverse relationship. Firstly, the total rate in domestic term experienced a large jump by 200, 000 in the ten years period. In 2001, the number was 400, 000 and then the total rate rose to 600, 000 in 2007 and the number was steady for the next 3 years. On the other hand, the commencing rate stood just under 200, 000 in 2001. Afterwards, the number was fluctuated around 200, 000 and finished roughly at this number in a decade.
The line charts compare the university applications of domestic and international
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in Australia over a decade.
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the figure for overseas enrollments rose over time in term of
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.
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, the
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rate
in local
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increased.
However
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experienced an opposite trend.

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,
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foreign enrollments
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at 200, 000 in 2001 followed by a sharp growth to around 800, 000 in 2010. Meanwhile, the graduate portion in overseas
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stood approximately at 100, 000. Then there was a moderate rise to 400, 000 in 10 years.

By contrast,
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and
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in local
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an inverse relationship.
Firstly
, the
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total
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rate
in domestic term experienced a large jump by 200, 000 in the ten years period. In 2001, the
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was 400, 000 and then the
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total
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rose to 600, 000 in 2007 and the
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was steady for the
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stood
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under 200, 000 in 2001. Afterwards, the
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was fluctuated
around 200, 000 and finished roughly at this
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in a decade.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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