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The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. 0AAd1
The visualization provided is a line graph which illustrates the average number of commuters traveling by different modes of transport in the UK over the period of time. The graph depicts three types of transportation such as, Car which is projected by a line which is blue in color. In the beginning of 1970 the number of people who used this mode for traveling was five million and gradually increased to approximately nine million by the year 2030 which is the highest data point compared to the other values on the graph. Coming to the next value, that is bus which is represented by a green line. Over the period of time the value has been decreasing substantially from close to four million commuters in 1970 to less than three million by the end of 2030. Lastly, train which is been represented by a yellow line which has a moderately increasing value from two million to five million by 2030. However, the car and train have a consistent number of commuters between 2000 to 2010. Overall the graph projects an insight that there are more no of o car c
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graph which illustrates the average number of commuters traveling by
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modes of transport in the UK over the period of time.

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Car which
is projected
by a
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line
which is
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blue in color
. In the beginning of 1970 the number of
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people
who
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this mode for traveling was five
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gradually
increased to approximately nine
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million
by the year 2030 which is the highest data point compared to the other values on the graph.

Coming to the
next
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value
,
that is
bus which
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by a green
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line
. Over the period of time the
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value
has been decreasing
substantially
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million
commuters in 1970 to less than three
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million
by the
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end
of 2030.

Lastly
, train which
is been
represented by a yellow
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which has a
moderately
increasing
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value
from two
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million
to five
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million
by 2030.
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, the car and train have a consistent number of commuters
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between 2000 to 2010
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Overall
the graph projects an insight that there are more
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

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