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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much ljjP9
Given are the pie charts that illustrate the average proportions of three types of nutrients, that is to say, sodium, saturated fat and added sugar, which can be harmful for health if consumed too much, in typical meals. The data is taken from U. S. A. As can be seen from the first diagram, which demonstrates the average proportions of sodium in meals, a consumption of sodium is the highest for dinner being 43%. By eating lunch, 29 percent of sodium is consumed, while breakfast and snacks include an equal proportion (14%) of sodium. According to the data in the second diagram, dinner contains 37% of saturated fat, while a consumption of it is 26% for lunch and 21% for snacks and the lowest is for breakfast being 16%. The latest diagram shows the highest percentage of added sugar in meals. According to this, snacks contains the highest amount of added sugar being 42% and the second is for dinner being over a fifth, while 16% for breakfast. All in all, the highest percentage of the nutrients are consumed for breakfast, although a consumption of added sugar for snacks is higher than breakfast.
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the pie charts that illustrate the average proportions of three types of nutrients,
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fat
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, which can be harmful for health if consumed too much, in typical meals. The data
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diagram, which demonstrates the average proportions of sodium in meals, a consumption of sodium is the highest for dinner being 43%. By eating lunch, 29 percent of sodium
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, while
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breakfast
and
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snacks
include an equal proportion (14%) of sodium. According to the data in the second diagram, dinner contains 37% of saturated
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fat
, while a consumption of it is 26% for lunch and 21% for
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snacks
and the lowest is for
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breakfast
being 16%. The latest diagram
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the highest percentage of
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added
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sugar
in meals. According to this,
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snacks
contains the highest amount of
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added
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sugar
being 42% and the second is for dinner being over a fifth, while 16% for breakfast.

All in all, the highest percentage of the nutrients
are consumed
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breakfast
, although a consumption of
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added
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sugar
for
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snacks
is higher than
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breakfast
.
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IELTS academic The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much

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