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The table below given information about the situation of marriage and age from 1960 to 2000 in Australia

The table below given information about the situation of marriage and age from 1960 to 2000 in Australia PyeJ
The given table illustrate the statistical data of religion and civil marriage along with average age of bride and groom in Australia from 1960 to 2000. Overall it can be seen from the table that religion marriage fluctuated with every decades where as civil marriage rules gradually over the years. Motion of age in both genders were grew up. According to the table in 1960 the religion marriage ratio was 25, 000 it was double at 50000 in 1980. Similarly in 1960 the portion of civil marriage was 8000 it escalated 16000 in 1980. However marriage showed a drastic fall and reached 32000 in 1990. Meanwhile civil marriages rules in every year. Number of civil marriages grew 5 times from 8000 in 1960 to 4000 in 2000 in Australia. Religion marriage is accelerated from 32000 to 34000 in 2000. The perfect age for marriage for girl was 21 in 1960 but increased rapidly to 25 years in 1980 and 30 years 2000. The average age for boys were 24 in 1960 after five decades is reached 32 year in 2000.
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given
table illustrate the statistical data of
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religion
and
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civil
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marriage
along with average
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age
of bride and groom in Australia from 1960 to 2000.

Overall
it can be
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seen
from the table that
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religion
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marriage
fluctuated with every
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decades
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where as
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civil
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marriage
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rules
gradually
over the years. Motion of
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age
in both genders were
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grew
up.

According to the table in 1960 the
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religion
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marriage
ratio was 25, 000 it was double at 50000 in 1980.
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Similarly
in 1960 the portion of
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civil
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marriage
was 8000 it escalated 16000 in 1980.
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However
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marriage
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showed
a drastic fall and reached 32000 in 1990.
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Meanwhile
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civil
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marriages
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rules
in every
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year
. Number of
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civil
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marriages
grew 5 times from 8000 in 1960 to 4000 in 2000 in Australia.
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Religion
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marriage
is accelerated
from 32000 to 34000 in 2000.

The perfect
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age
for
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marriage
for girl was 21 in 1960
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but
increased
rapidly
to 25 years in 1980 and 30 years 2000. The average
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age
for boys were 24 in 1960 after five decades
is reached
32
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year
in 2000.
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IELTS academic The table below given information about the situation of marriage and age from 1960 to 2000 in Australia

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