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The table below depicts the information about the posts held by women in parliament and in management in 5 countries in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The given table illustrates the parliament and management positions played by woman in Canada, Ukraine, Egypt, Rome and Italy in 2000, it is proved from information given that of woman held seats in government sector was greatest proportions in Canada and Egypt, whereas the highest proportion in management sector in Rome and Ukraine. Woman take control in government sector with 54% and 52% in Canada and Egypt respectively, while Italy have nearly percentage was reach about 40%, by contrast the Rome and Ukraine have the least percentage with 10% and 23% respectively. On other hand female in management sector was likely to take the leader positions which had the greatest ratio in Rome and Ukraine with 52% and 40% respectively, but the woman in Italy have the least proportion by 25%, however the female have the similar percentage in Canada and Egypt by 36%. Overall the woman is take the control with highest ratio in government sector in Canada and Egypt, while woman in management sector is likely to held more seats in Rome and Ukraine.
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positions played by
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in Canada, Ukraine, Egypt, Rome and Italy in 2000, it
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held seats in
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government
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was
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proportions in Canada and Egypt, whereas the highest proportion in
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management
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in Rome and Ukraine.

Woman take control in
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government
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with 54% and 52% in Canada and Egypt
respectively
, while Italy have
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percentage was reach about 40%, by contrast the Rome and Ukraine have the least percentage with 10% and 23%
respectively
.

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management
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was likely to take the leader positions which had the greatest ratio in Rome and Ukraine with 52% and 40%
respectively
,
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the
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woman
in Italy have the least proportion by 25%,
however
the female have the similar percentage in Canada and Egypt by 36%.

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woman
is
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take
the control with
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highest
ratio in
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in Canada and Egypt, while
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in
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management
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is likely to held more seats in Rome and Ukraine.
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IELTS academic The table below depicts the information about the posts held by women in parliament and in management in 5 countries in 2000.

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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