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The supplied bar chart illustrates the data about avarage annual water consumption in Australia for last year in selected cities, namely, Sydney, Perth, Adelaide, Brisbane, Melbourne and Canbera, while the given pie chart reveals the information about what percentage water was used in the given purpose by question in 2014.

The supplied bar chart illustrates the data about avarage annual water consumption in Australia for last year in selected cities, namely, Sydney, Perth, Adelaide, Brisbane, Melbourne and Canbera, while the given pie chart reveals the information about what percentage water was used in the given purpose by question in 2014. 7Lj0Y
The supplied bar chart illustrates the data about avarage annual water consumption in Australia for last year in selected cities, namely, Sydney, Perth, Adelaide, Brisbane, Melbourne and Canbera, while the given pie chart reveals the information about what percentage water was used in the given purpose by question in 2014. Overall, what stands out from the chart is that the biggest water consumer was Perth. Another interesting point is that water supplied for agricultural sectors was the highest portion among others. Looking at the details, as regards bar chart, the highest water consumption was in the city of Perth with 300 kilolitres per property. İt was followed by Brisbane and Adelaide, 250 for the former and 240 kilolitres a year on avarage for the latter. Sydney residents consumed 200 kilolitres a year water, and the smallest consumption on a yearly basis was recorded in Merbourne and Canberra, 150 and 140 kilolitres per property, respectively. With respect to pie chart, agricultural industry dominated other sectors regarding water consumption with 67%. Following this, the largest ratio (9%) in terms of water distribution depended on Household. The next rates of distributed water belonged to Water supply, sewage and drainage (7%), electricity and gas supply (7%), Manufacturing (4%), other industries (4%) and Mining (2%), which means that this was the smallest fraction.
The supplied bar
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illustrates the data about
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avarage
annual
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water
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consumption
in Australia for last year in selected cities,
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, Sydney, Perth, Adelaide, Brisbane, Melbourne and
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Canbera
, while the
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pie
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reveals the information about what percentage
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water
was
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used
in the
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given
purpose by question in 2014.

Overall
, what stands out from the
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chart
is that the biggest
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water
consumer was Perth. Another interesting point is that
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water
supplied for agricultural sectors was the highest portion among others.

Looking at the
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details
, as regards bar
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chart
, the highest
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water
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consumption
was in the city of Perth with 300
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kilolitres
per property.
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İt
was followed
by Brisbane and Adelaide, 250 for the former and 240
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kilolitres
a year on
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avarage
for the latter.
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Sydney residents
consumed 200
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kilolitres
a year
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water
, and the smallest
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consumption
on a yearly basis
was recorded
in
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Merbourne
and Canberra, 150 and 140
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kilolitres
per property,
respectively
.

With respect to pie
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chart
, agricultural industry dominated other sectors regarding
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water
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consumption
with 67%. Following this, the largest ratio (9%) in terms of
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water
distribution depended on Household. The n
ext
rates of distributed
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water
belonged to
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Water
supply, sewage and drainage (7%), electricity and gas supply (7%), Manufacturing (4%), other industries (4%) and Mining (2%), which means that this was the smallest fraction.

IELTS academic The supplied bar chart illustrates the data about avarage annual water consumption in Australia for last year in selected cities, namely, Sydney, Perth, Adelaide, Brisbane, Melbourne and Canbera, while the given pie chart reveals the information about what percentage water was used in the given purpose by question in 2014.

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