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The story of the snow day

The story of the snow day K3lMw

My sister woke me up early this morning. She ran into my room before the alarm clock went off. “Look outside! ” she yelled. I got out of bed and looked out the window. All that I could see was white snow! There was a man shoveling the sidewalk in front of our house. Mom came into the room. She brought us each a mug of hot chocolate. “No school today! ” she said. I was very happy. My sister was happy, too. Mom left the room to find our snow clothes. She gave me my blue snowsuit. She also gave me a hat and mittens. “What are you going to do today with no school? ” she asked. “I want to watch Frozen movie and build a snowman! ” “How about you? Do you want to watch movie and build a snowman with me? ” I asked my sister. “Yeah ok. Shall we have some popcorn? ” she asked me. “Alright. I will get it for you guys” mom said. “Thank you mom” me and my sister said. Mom left the room and comeback with a bowl of popcorn, so we spending time watching movie together.

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