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The statistics of tourists to Scotland who visited went to the various attractions

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Overall, Zoo had the least passengers in the whole period. There were increasing trends in Zoo and Castle for the duration of the period shown in the line graph. Firstly, the attractions that had downward trends were Aquarium and Festival. There was a striking alteration that the gap between them was 10% at the beginning of the period in 1980 and 2010, it altered to approximately 20%. The line graph of the percentage of visitors to Aquarium started at 20% at the beginning and peaked at nearly 35% after 15 years and there was a plummet that made the number turned back to the beginning in 1990, it gradually rose in the next 15 years and commenced falling sharply then hit the bottom at below 10%. The line graph of people visiting Castle was not changing too much, it started at 30% at the beginning and slowly decreased to nearly 26% in 2010. In addition, both of them converged two times in 1983 and 1987.
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, Zoo had the least passengers in the whole period. There were increasing trends in Zoo and Castle for the duration of the period shown in the line graph.

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, the attractions that had downward trends were Aquarium and Festival. There was a striking alteration that the gap between them was 10% at the
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of the period in 1980 and 2010, it altered to approximately 20%. The line graph of the percentage of visitors to Aquarium
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