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The statistics below show basic information about users of three different online social networking sites.

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The given chart represents some primary data about three social sites which have been used by individuals in three groups of age. Therefore, as it can be noticed, human-being are categorized into groups such as, adolescent, younger adults and older adults. Overall, it is visible from the figure the most popular site by the adolescent, obviously is site c, which is about fifty-five percent. Even though, as it can be seen in older adults group only 10 percent of people accurately have used this site. Furthermore, the lowest percentage in this group evidently is for site B which is unfortunately just 7%. However, as it is concerned, in individuals who older than 25 are 60% properly.
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IELTS academic The statistics below show basic information about users of three different online social networking sites.

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