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The given pie and line graphs illustrate the clearly information about the population alteration in three wildlife species

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The given pie and line graphs illustrate the clearly information about the population alteration in three wildlife species in the about five-year period from 2011 to 2016 in North America and Federal Spending on the protection of these particular species. Overall, the data indicates that while the figure in population of bears went up dramatically to about 170000 in 2016, the number of dolphins drops continuously to an approximate zero number in the same year. Besides the difference in trend of growing of population, there are also a big contrast in the percentage of federal spending for both species. As is illustrated by the pie graph, Dolphin is just gained only 5 percent of federal support and most of the supporting is invested for Bears, up to 65 in percentage. Interestingly, the change in Whales population is stable and the number just went in the range between 100000 and 50000 from 2011 to 2016, not many specific differences. In 2016, it reached about 80000 with the medium percentage, about 30 percent from the federal spending for this specie. It is clearly that both of graphs show the same trend and they have the relationship with each other. The change in population effects to the adjustment of the percentages of federal investment and vice versa.
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alteration in three wildlife species in the about five-year period from 2011 to 2016 in North America and
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Federal
Spending on the protection of these particular species.

Overall
, the data indicates that while the figure in
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population
of bears went up
dramatically
to about 170000 in 2016, the number of dolphins drops
continuously
to an approximate zero number in the same year.
Besides
the difference in trend of growing of
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population
, there are
also
a
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big
contrast in the percentage of
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federal
spending for both species. As
is illustrated
by the pie graph, Dolphin is
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just
gained
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only
5 percent of
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federal
support and most of the supporting
is invested
for Bears, up to 65 in percentage.

Interestingly
, the
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change
in Whales
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population
is stable and the number
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just
went in the range between 100000 and 50000 from 2011 to 2016, not
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many
specific differences. In 2016, it reached about 80000 with the medium percentage, about 30 percent from the
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federal
spending for this specie.

It is
clearly
that both of graphs
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show
the same
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trend and
they have the relationship with each other. The
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change
in
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population
effects to the adjustment of the percentages of
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federal
investment and vice versa.
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IELTS academic The given pie and line graphs illustrate the clearly information about the population alteration in three wildlife species

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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