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The rendered bar graph depicts the information about the percentage contribution made by the agriculture ,industry and service sector to the Indian economy between 1960 and 2000

The rendered bar graph depicts the information about the percentage contribution made by the agriculture, industry and service sector to the Indian economy between 1960 and 2000 rGX0l
As per the bar graph, it is apparent that agriculture, was higher which accounted for approximately 70%and its followed by downward trend in the last year 2000. Followed by, industry was becomed 20%in first year. There was 20%of contribution to India's gross in 1970. After that, it showed the slightly fluctuated in the last year. Moving further, in the services, it was began at around 18%in 1990 and in the next four year (from 1970to 2000) it represent the upward trend in 2000.
As per the bar graph, it is apparent that agriculture, was higher which accounted for approximately 70%and its followed by downward trend in the last
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2000. Followed by, industry was
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becomed
20%in
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. There was 20%of contribution to India's gross in 1970. After that, it
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showed
the
slightly
fluctuated in the last
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year
. Moving
further
, in the services, it was
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began
at around 18%in 1990 and in the
next
four
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year
(from 1970to 2000) it
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represent
the upward trend in 2000.
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IELTS academic The rendered bar graph depicts the information about the percentage contribution made by the agriculture, industry and service sector to the Indian economy between 1960 and 2000

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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