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QUESTION:Inspite of advances made in Agriculture many people in the world still go hungry .why is this case and what could be done

QUESTION: Inspite of advances made in Agriculture many people in the world still go hungry. why is this case and what could be done pKMG0
Answer Most people still suffer from hunger globally irrespective of agricultural advancement. This could be attributed to ignorance and poverty. public enlightenment and provision of loans and equipment by Government can curb this problem. Hunger is considered a global problem that is the reason why reseachers and agriculturists had worked hard over the years to improve farming which had also given rise to high productivity. Their studies had transformed into manufacturing of mechanised equipments such as tractors, plough, and other important tools as well as improved seeds and roots that makes farming easier and enjoyable. However, many people lack the knowledge to operate this machines and also the particular season and the type of soil suitable for a particular crops. These factors have hindered productivity and there by given rise to low food production so access to food materials to some individuals are compromised. In addition lack of funds to procure these equipment agricultural produce are also an issue of concern for some because many of these items are not cost effective therefore quite a number of farmers resolve to peasant farming and the resultant effects are minimal outcome in food supply. However some strategies could be adopted in order to tackle the issue of hunger. public enlightenment inform of community mobilization and advocacy should be done in order to teach people about mechanised farming, the type of crops and usage, right from the grassroot. Also incentives inform of loans and supply of agricultural materials such as seeds and roots at no cost or subsidized rate should be done by the Authorities. Finally a healthy nation is one devoid of hunger, so all stakeholders should collaborate and ensure that they do their part towards making food available by implementing all the necessary steps needed to achieve success in food production. Adrenaline please vet for me. thanks
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Most
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people
still
suffer from hunger globally irrespective of agricultural advancement. This could
be attributed
to ignorance and poverty.
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public
enlightenment and provision of loans and equipment by
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Government
can curb this problem.

Hunger
is considered
a global problem
that is
the reason why
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reseachers
and agriculturists had worked
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hard
over the years to
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improve
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farming
which had
also
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given
rise to high productivity. Their studies had transformed into manufacturing of
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mechanised
equipments such as tractors,
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plough
, and other
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important
tools
as well
as
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improved
seeds and roots that
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makes
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farming
easier and enjoyable.
However
,
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many
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people
lack the knowledge to operate this machines and
also
the particular season and the type of soil suitable for a particular crops. These factors have hindered productivity and there by
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given
rise to low
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food
production
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so
access to
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food
materials to
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some
individuals
are compromised
. In
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addition
lack of funds to procure
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these equipment
agricultural produce are
also
an issue of concern for
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some
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because
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many
of these items are not cost effective
therefore
quite a number of farmers resolve to peasant
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farming
and the resultant effects are minimal outcome in
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food
supply.

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However
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some
strategies could
be adopted
in order to tackle the issue of hunger.
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public
enlightenment inform of community mobilization and advocacy should
be done
in order to teach
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people
about
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mechanised
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farming
, the type of crops and usage, right from the grassroot.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Also
incentives inform of loans and supply of agricultural materials such as seeds and roots at no cost or subsidized rate should
be done
by the Authorities.

Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Finally
a healthy nation is one devoid of hunger,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
all stakeholders should collaborate and ensure that they do their part towards making
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
available by implementing all the necessary steps needed to achieve success in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
production.

Adrenaline
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please
vet for me. thanks
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IELTS academic QUESTION: Inspite of advances made in Agriculture many people in the world still go hungry. why is this case and what could be done

Academic
  American English
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305 words
5.5
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