Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The bar chart provides information about how many hours adolescents spent each week carrying out seven specific activities between 2002 to 2007.

The bar chart provides information about how many hours adolescents spent each week carrying out seven specific activities between 2002 to 2007. jVEjd
The bar chart provides information about how many hours adolescents spent each week carrying out seven specific activities between 2002 to 2007. Overall, it is evident that throughout the period, teenagers spent the most time by watching television while they spent the least time by Bowling. Moreover, the popularity of goint to discos, watching tele, and shopping increased whereas hours spent on doing homework, sports or bowling declined. In terms of going to pubs, watching tele, and shopping, the graphs shows a steady increase. In 2002, adolescents spent about 8, 25, and 7 hours in pubs, watching tele and shopping respectively. After a steady growth they reached to about 17, 37, and 15respectively in 2007. On the other hand, time spent on doing homework, sports, or enjoying bowling experienced a gradual decline while the hours invested in watching DVDs fluctuated over the years. In 2002, time spent on homework, sports and bowling was about 12, 10, and 3 respectively whereas they reached at approximately 7, 2 and 1 respectively in 2007. However the data for time spent watching DVDs showed some fluctuation. Starting at about 11 in 2002, it reached the peak at about 17 in 2004 only to decline at 10 in the year 2007.
The bar chart provides information about how
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hours
adolescents
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spent
each week carrying out seven specific activities
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 2002 and 2007".
between 2002 to 2007
.

Overall
, it is evident that throughout the period,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spent
the most
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
by watching television while they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spent
the least
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
by Bowling.
Moreover
, the popularity of
Possible spelling mistake found.
goint
to discos, watching
Possible spelling mistake found.
tele
, and shopping increased whereas
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hours
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spent
on doing homework, sports or bowling declined.

In terms of going to pubs, watching
Possible spelling mistake found.
tele
, and shopping, the graphs
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
a steady increase. In 2002, adolescents
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spent
about 8, 25, and 7
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hours
in pubs, watching
Possible spelling mistake found.
tele
and shopping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
respectively
. After a steady growth they reached to about 17, 37, and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
15respectively
in 2007.

On the other hand
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spent
on doing homework, sports, or enjoying bowling experienced a gradual decline while the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hours
invested in watching DVDs fluctuated over the years. In 2002,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spent
on homework, sports and bowling was about 12, 10, and 3
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
respectively
whereas they reached at approximately 7, 2 and 1
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
respectively
in 2007.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
However
the data for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spent
watching DVDs
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
fluctuation. Starting at about 11 in 2002, it reached the peak at about 17 in 2004
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
to decline at 10 in the year 2007.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The bar chart provides information about how many hours adolescents spent each week carrying out seven specific activities between 2002 to 2007.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
206 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts