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he presented bar graph depicted the reasons and ratio for wind pollution in China, America, Japan, and Australia in 2021.

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The presented bar graph depicted the reasons and ratio for wind pollution in China, America, Japan, and Australia in 2021. Overall, China is responsible for causing the most significant amount of pollution in the atmosphere. Whereas Australia exhaust only the least number of fumes through its national sectors. It is clear from the information that, Industries are in the leading position in polluting the air system in Asia, especially in China and Japan, about 80% and 45% respectively. However, America and Australia were able to keep their pollution levels under 30 percent. Consequently, the travelling sector is also creating a negative impact on the environment of all the four countries, although in China and America it went beyond 50%. Additionally, the electricity generating fumes are also impacting the ozone layer by contaminating harmful elements. The amount is nearly 60% in China; however, it is still under one-third of the total pollution level in other countries.
The presented bar graph depicted the reasons and ratio for wind
pollution
in China, America, Japan, and Australia in 2021.

Overall
, China is responsible for causing the most significant amount of
pollution
in the atmosphere.
Whereas
Australia exhaust
only
the least number of fumes through its national sectors.

It is
clear
from the information that, Industries are in the leading position in polluting the air system in Asia,
especially
in China and Japan, about 80% and 45%
respectively
.
However
, America and Australia were able to
keep
their
pollution
levels under 30 percent.

Consequently
, the travelling sector is
also
creating a
negative
impact on the environment of all the four countries, although in China and America it went beyond 50%.
Additionally
, the electricity generating fumes are
also
impacting the ozone layer by contaminating harmful elements. The amount is
nearly
60% in China;
however
, it is
still
under one-third of the total
pollution
level in other countries.
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IELTS academic he presented bar graph depicted the reasons and ratio for wind pollution in China, America, Japan, and Australia in 2021.

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