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The question below is also about the destinations of graduate students. You can try to answer it using the language learned in this blog post.

The question below is also about the destinations of graduate students. You can try to answer it using the language learned in this blog post. 73pyb
The bar charts depict the number of (graduate and postgraduate ) students who were did work after leaving College. During the 2008 in the United Kingdom. Overall, it is clear that from the charts the majority students did further Study. Another noticeable point is that the smallest proportion were voluntary work on the charts. With regards to graduates, 29665 students did further Study which was higher than the rest of the others three destination. On the other hand, the fewest number (3500) of students kept them as Voluntaries. The number of students who involved in part time work and unemployment that were averagely equal (17735and 16235)respectively. In treams of postgraduate. the number of students for further study and part time were approximately similar (2725 and 2535) and also which were highest position given the charts. And the figure for unemployment was 1625. The finally the lowest number of students did voluntary work at about 345.
The bar
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depict the
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number
of (graduate and postgraduate
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)
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students
who were
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did
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work
after leaving College. During the 2008 in the United Kingdom.
Overall
, it is
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clear
that from the
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charts
the majority
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students
did
further
Study. Another noticeable point is that the smallest proportion were voluntary
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work
on the
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charts
.
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With regards to
graduates, 29665
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students
did
further
Study which was higher than the rest of the others three
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destination
.
On the other hand
, the fewest
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number
(3500) of
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students
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kept
them as Voluntaries. The
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number
of
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students
who involved in
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part time
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work
and unemployment that were
averagely
equal (17735and 16235)
respectively
. In
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treams
of postgraduate.
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the
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number
of
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students
for
further
study and
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part time
were approximately similar (2725 and 2535) and
also
which were
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highest
position
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given
the
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. And the figure for unemployment was 1625. The
finally
the lowest
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number
of
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students
did voluntary
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at about 345.
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IELTS academic The question below is also about the destinations of graduate students. You can try to answer it using the language learned in this blog post.

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
155 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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