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The provided table compares how the proportion of people from 65 years old change in the past and the future in Canada, Germany and the UK over the course of 42 years, starting from 1988.

The provided table compares how the proportion of people from 65 years old change in the past and the future in Canada, Germany and the UK over the course of 42 years, starting from 1988. NMpYd
The provided table compares how the proportion of people from 65 years old change in the past and the future in Canada, Germany and the UK over the course of 42 years, starting from 1988. Overall, it can be seen that the figure of people aged 65 and more experienced an upward trend in three countries. Moreover, after more than four decades, the percentage of people from 65 years old in Germany was the dominant source, registering a markedly higher figure than that for the others countries. With regards to the first period, a significant increase of 5% was seen in the proportion of the population in Canada and Germany. By contrast, there was a negligible rise of 1% in the UK, which the trajectory was less rising sharply. As for the future, it is likely that similar patterns will occur. The figure for people from 65 is predicted to climb substantially by 5% in 2030. The UK is the country where the percentage of people aged 65 and above will have accounted for the least of the three countries.
The provided table compares how the proportion of
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in the past and the future in Canada, Germany and the UK over the course of 42 years, starting from 1988.

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in the proportion of the population in Canada and Germany. By contrast, there was a negligible rise of 1% in the UK, which the trajectory was less rising
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aged 65 and above will have accounted for the least of the three countries.
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