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The provided maps represent the path to the city hospital in two different years (2007 and 2010).

The provided maps represent the path to the city hospital in two different years (2007 and 2010). b23O6
The provided maps represent the path to the city hospital in two different years (2007 and 2010). Looking from an overall perspective, it is apparent that the major changes are additional car parking space, construction of a new bus station, and new roundabouts. The majority of the hospital underwent very little change. The bus stops on either side of the road were demolished and one big bus complex was added. The roads (city, hospital, and ring roads) all remained largely the same, though two small lanes were built off to connect the new bus station to the roundabouts on either side of the hospital road. The city hospital building was unaltered. The changes were mainly around the hospital and the largest of these was related to the parking area. In 2007, there was a combined little space for both public and staff whereas, in 2010, an exclusive parking facility was added along the eastside to the city hospital.
The provided maps represent the path to the city
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hospital
in two
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different
years (2007 and 2010).

Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is apparent that the major
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changes
are additional car parking space, construction of a new bus station, and new roundabouts.

The majority of the
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hospital
underwent
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very
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little
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change
. The bus
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stops
on either side of the
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road
were demolished
and one
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big
bus complex was
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added
.
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The
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roads
(city,
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hospital
, and ring
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roads)
all remained
largely
the same, though two
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small
lanes
were built
off to connect the new bus station to the roundabouts on either side of the
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hospital
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road
.
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The
city
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hospital
building
was unaltered
.

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The
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changes
were
mainly
around the
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hospital
and the largest of these
was related
to the parking area. In 2007, there was a combined
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little
space for both public and staff whereas, in 2010, an exclusive parking facility was
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added
along the
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eastside
to the city
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hospital
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IELTS academic The provided maps represent the path to the city hospital in two different years (2007 and 2010).

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158 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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