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The provided maps depict a dramatic development of a certain region over the course of five years starting in 2015.

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The provided maps depict a dramatic development of a certain region over the course of five years starting in 2015. Overall, it can be seen that the whole town experienced several changes with the addition of distinct amenities and the reuse of the train system. In 2005 the whole area witnessed a large space of empty land. There was a factory surrounded by a lot of trees in the North-West of the town. In the East of the factory was the farm and the church. In this year, the railway was not in service and there was a main road ran along the town from the factory to the southeast and passed the gas station. There was a dining establishment which was situated halfway between the hotel and the petrol filling spot along the street. Moreover, there were the existence of many trees dotted around the center of the map. By 2010, all the aforementioned facilities still remained wit the exception of the farm. After 5 years, the agriculture land was converted into a golf course. A new road which leads to the golf field was constructed and the abandoned railway was reopened to serve the citizen’s need. The most significant addition was the construction of a new train station in the North of the town and the bus stop along the path toward the golf course. Several public services such as hospital, carpark were put in to services and replaced lines of pine trees in the central area.
The provided maps depict a dramatic development of a certain region over the course of five years starting in 2015.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that the whole
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town
experienced several
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changes
with the addition of distinct amenities and the reuse of the train system.

In 2005 the whole area witnessed a large space of empty land. There was a factory surrounded by
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a lot of
trees in the North-West of the
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town
. In the East of the factory was the farm and the church. In this year, the railway was not in service and there was a main road ran along the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
town
from the factory to the southeast and passed the gas station. There was a dining establishment which
was situated
halfway between the hotel and the petrol filling spot along the street.
Moreover
, there were the existence of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
trees dotted around the center of the map.

By 2010, all the aforementioned facilities
still
remained wit the
The usual collocation for "exception" in this context is "to" not "of". Did you mean "exception to"?
exception of
the farm. After 5 years, the agriculture land
was converted
into a golf course. A new road which leads to the golf field
was constructed
and the abandoned railway
was reopened
to serve the citizen’s need. The most significant addition was the construction of a new train station in the North of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
town
and the bus
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
along the path toward the golf course. Several public services such as hospital,
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carpark
were put
in to services and replaced lines of pine trees in the central area.
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