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The diagram shows conversion of thermal energy to electrical energy

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The flow chart illustrates the process of producing electrical energy using thermal energy. Overall, it can be seen that, the production of electricity took place by a man-made process in which cold water was processed in 5 various stages and at the end generator and turbine was used to produce and convert thermal energy to electrical energy. In the first stage, cold water was transferred to injection well through a 4. 5 km long piping. In the next stage water goes to geothermal zone where it gets heated by hot rocks. After that it was stored in production well and from there it gets pumped up to steam condenser where steam gets condensed. In the last stage, the condensed steam helps in turning the turbine and as a generator is connected to turbine it results in production of electricity which was then supplied to power grid for commercial use.
The flow chart illustrates the process of producing electrical energy using thermal energy.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that, the production of electricity took place by a
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man
-made process in which
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cold
water
was processed
in 5 various
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stages
and at the
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end
generator and turbine was
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used
to produce and convert thermal energy to electrical energy.

In the
first
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stage
,
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cold
water
was transferred
to injection well through a 4. 5 km long piping. In the
next
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stage
water goes to geothermal zone where it
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gets
heated by hot rocks. After that it
was stored
in production well and from there it
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gets
pumped up to steam condenser where steam
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gets
condensed.

In the last
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stage
, the condensed steam
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helps
in turning the turbine and as a generator
is connected
to turbine it results in production of electricity which was then supplied to power grid for commercial
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use
.

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